If you’re unfamiliar with WIPpet Wednesday, it’s a great weekly meme hosted by Emily Witt where authors can share excerpts from Works in Progress. I have greatly enjoyed reading others’ WIPs and getting to know other authors’ stories.
Today, I have a section from my 2nd Manuscript. If you’d like to keep up with my excerpts, you’re welcome to click on the new WIPPET WEDNESDAY tab on top.
3/30 = 30 + 3 x 2 = 66 words
Context:Β This is from Joel’s point of view. He’s doing a little…contemplating…while Lacey and Serena are in the next room over.
The last time I heard her laugh was at the Halloween party. His smile faded. He hated thinking about that stupid party; it brought his anger from the bottom of his stomach to the top of his throat. Heβd spent a week brooding over the whole situation; who knew powerlessness could be so overwhelming. Even now, that feeling of utter helplessness crept up at his heels.
I really like that little excerpt, it reads very well! And look at that, a character with the same name as mine! If in pronunciation only π
Nice. I almost spelled it like that, too. Not sure why I chose the other way but ‘shrugs’. Do people call you ‘rina’ at all? That’s an occasional nickname of my character.
They do, that’s my nickname for the few people who use one π
aww! I use ‘rena, as the nickname, but only occasionally. Her best friend and her family call her that. Good to know it’s legit π
Hate it when a somewhat positive memory is ruined by a less happy one. I know exactly how he’s feeling here.
aww thanks!! yep that happens a lot in real life for sure. π
Love this description, “it brought his anger from the bottom of his stomach to the top of his throat.” Very nice snippet.
Awesome! It’s hard to find a unique way to describe anger and disappointment, thanks for the compliment!
What a brilliant snippet! I love the emotion conveyed. It reads so flawlessly off the page. Thanks for sharing <3